Rated as a WIP
This has some serious potential. Please treat this as a WIP and don't give up on it, like I have on my WIPs haha.
If I could give a couple of ideas...
Make sure you keep a constant beat throughout (except for areas intentionally meant to be a different beat). You have one at the very beginning that is definite and lasts until 00:22, and I think you mimic it with a deep bass past then.
Also, be sure that you match soprano and tenor voices with complimentary bass voices. Think of an actual band's bass. If it were not there, the song may feel lighter than intended. However, leaving out the bass can give a light mood that IS intended. Just keep it in mind, haha, because I never remember that myself.
Otherwise, this is pretty good.